I joined scriptfrenzy.org where you undertake to write a 100 page script in the month of April. As is my way, I approach this project without any ideas for characters, plot or any other preconceptions, preferring to let the story tell itself. I begin where I am, the title riffing off of a necklace I recently beaded, the opening line off a line of a recent post. I am also presently taken with some of Bill Brouard's digital art images, which I find inspiring, and which form a visual core for the description of the two characters in this section.
If I complete the challenge, I intend to condense the hundred pages into about fifteen and perhaps make a little video of some sort, not sure. I'll only leave this up for a few days, Blogger stripping all the correct script formatting that it's written in. This is yesterday's effort - and to me, today, it reads more like a Greek play. It's meant to be a poetic dialogue, that's what I wanted to write. Anyway, sharing...
EXT. BEACH, OCEAN TO ONE SIDE, FOREST IN DISTANCE ON OTHER SIDE - NIGHT
A woman walks on a deserted beach. She is dimly lit by spotlight. To one side is the ocean; in the background on the other side we see the shadows of a dense forest.
She is wearing a mid-calf length white cotton dress that has a pale floral pattern; it is loose but revealing of her curves, cleavage. She wears a head-dress that is composed of partial faces, eyes, shards of mirror, images projected and pasted, like a lantern in that it emits light yet also lit from without. Whispering sounds that rise and fall with the waves accompany her.
She is laughing. She is speaking out loud to herself, and thus introduces herself to the audience.
ESMARELDA
I laugh hysterically like a hyena let out of the zoo. It’s as if I am about to fly apart into my components.
I am a kaleidoscope that spins and bits of colour and sound are reflected everywhere in ever-changing fractal patterns.
It’s as if I am not a whole but a composition of varieties held together aesthetically.
I carry spirits with me. I have many seeing eyes. The eyes are all around my head, some of them are men’s eyes, or women’s, or children’s. I don’t know how they came to be there. I have eyes in the front of my head that have dark brown iris’ and blink. The other eyes never sleep.
Everywhere I go voices whisper. Voices telling me about worlds I know nothing of. Voices telling me what is to become, what has been, what will never be, what has always been.
Was I divinely ordained to the sun, or the moon? Both of which glisten on my ear lobes in lustrous earrings, though I do not know where the jewels came from. Perhaps it is the ocean that is my compatriot spirit. My name is Esmarelda- a Spanish name meaning emerald, but mar means sea, briny, ocean, the blue, the deep, drink.
Was I born out of the ocean foam? Perhaps I was born under an artist’s hand.
I don't have blood or bones. I’m composed of images, translucencies and opacities, pastel pencil lines and oil paint, planes of motion move when I walk. The eyes all about my head watch. I am a vision become real.
Or perhaps I’m not sane. Or perhaps I am very, very sane.
Sometimes I hover above the ground in the forest, alone. I converse with angels.
I bleed like everyone else.
If you cut me, I’d fall away like paper.
Esmarelda leans to pick up a stray seagull feather on the sand. She brushes it over her wrist, holds it like a stylus.
ESMARELDA
Why don’t I have paper, a pencil when words form, already distilled? That I listen to even as I speak them, that appear like the wind of their own volition?
A male angel in silhouette flies towards her, lands beside her on the beach. He wears only a white thong. He is young and muscled, though he has a purity about him.
AARON
I have come from the mountains that are dissolving into sand deserts. Chameleons appear everywhere with their tongues flicking, eating sand bugs. Otherwise the terrain is empty. It is high up, in the place they call the Himalayas. I fly through the future and between peaks are hot deserts of fire.
ESMARELDA
Lie with me, angel. Lie with me here on the sand. Fold your wings around me.
Aaron moves towards Esmarelda, his arms open. They embrace. Their hands glide over each other’s bodies. They lock their bodies together, undulating with passion. There is fierceness in their lovemaking. As they slide to the ground, her legs open around him, and they make love. His wings are held high behind him; her headdress is visible. They are a beautiful, exotic couple.
Distant choral singing and natural organic sounds of ocean, sand and shells accompany their love song on the beach. After orgasm, Esmarelda lies back and speaks.
ESMARELDA
As beautiful as making love to a divine song… such passion on the crest of a wave, you bring me up to it, and then wash me blissfully over. You are my sea-light.
AARON
Angels are like bonobos, my dear! We make love anytime we wish with anyone we wish. It’s an orgasmic heaven!
They laugh. Esmarelda pours sand from her hand onto his thigh.
ESMARELDA
I like it when you fly by. You’re beautiful and fun. But who am I, Aaron? No one else sees you. They think I imagine you, that I am a troubled woman who is consumed by imaginary spirits and voices. When I told Cheri about you, she laughed. She said I was afraid of men, that men were afraid of me, that I made you up.
AARON
Only a few have the special sight to see the angels who protect all creatures who live in time and space and are subject to the whims of fate and to entropy, to decay.
There are many levels of worlds within this one. At one time they thought of it as hierarchies, stacked on top of each other, from the bestial to the angelic.
But we all exist in the same continuum, you and I, and all the other beings. The only true differences between us are that our perceptions are opened to varying degrees.
Your eyes, my beautiful Esmarelda, are more open than most.
ESMARELDA
I have too many eyes! No one else has so many! Yet no one but you and the other angels see the eyes in me which are always looking.
Aaron shakes his head.
AARON
People do sense what appears as a headdress that emits light and colour and seems to be composed of translucent moving images. They feel not watched, but witnessed. While they are fearful for you with your visions, there is also comfort emanating from you and this is why you are left to wander freely. You have a power about you. Everyone feels this.
Esmarelda, interjecting, points to a flock of angels approaching in the sky over the ocean.
ESMARELDA
Shhh… my philosophical angel! Where are the angels flying? There are so many.
Aaron’s massive golden wings open and as he lifts into the air, he caresses and kisses Esmarelda’s hand.
AARON
A gigantic tidal wave has swept over half the earth. There are many dead, many grieving.
The angels of the earth are congregating to help the dead in their mystical journeys, and to help sustain the spirits of the living so they may have the courage to continue.
Esmarelda waves to the airborne angel who turns in his flight towards the flock of angels and joins them as they fly along the beach. They fade into an altocumulus mackerel cloud sky - their wings becoming clouds - which fade out as they disappear. There is a deep sound of angelic music, choral voices in a Philip Glass-type composition of layering of similar sounds until a tonal density is achieved.
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I read it a couple of times, Brenda. I think I will stay mum about the content and form until you finish it, because I don´t want to interrupt your flow with any intrusive comments of my own based on preconceived notions of drama versus narrative, image versus dialogue, psychological characterization versus archetypal.
ReplyDeleteThe Jade Heart is clearly going to be a very ambitious piece, mystico-sexual, touching the different cosmic realms. In that sense it reminds me more of pure art cinema such as CREMASTER, but at the same time it has the element of performance art to it, Laurie Anderson meets Wim Wenders. I can´t wait to read more. I am excited for you, and support entirely your ambition to both write a full script and condense it down to a treatment in one month. That really keeps the flow going.
The best thing I can do for you right now is simply say, go for it, my sweet Brenda!
Make it happen, flesh out the angelic and render the invisible aspects of the visible. Anything more would not be collaborative, would only disturb your deep cognitive unconscious that is sifting images in your sleep. As we say in Spanish, ´¡Que duermas con los angeles!´
My only concrete remark would be that either you have deliberately changed the traditional castellano name Esmeralda to Esmarelda, or that in your first full onrush of creative endeavor you didn´t notice the typo. In the latter case, hit replace and you´re set.
Muchos besos desde las sombras de la Alhambra,
Tu amigo y admirador,
JFW
John, thank you so very much for your sensitivity to the so-called 'creative process' - the tiny new shoots appearing that are most tender. I appreciate your support and your stepping lightly around what I have written so far. This quality of respect that you have for the work of others is remarkable, and I've noticed it many times, and am grateful to be a recipient now. Not only are you a very fine artist in your own right, but your ability to inspire and encourage others to reach their potential is a remarkable gift that few possess to the degree that you do.
ReplyDeleteI thank you for your initial comments, and, as ever, you are bang on, as they say. Wim Wenders' & Handke's 'Wings of Desire' being my very favourite film, and I adore Laurie Anderson. I can't say myself at this point where this piece is going, but an archetypal, mystico-sexual aspect is definitely present.
While Bill Brouard gave me permission to write descriptively of some of his recent digital art, and Esmarelda is shaped on an image he created, and oh what an image! - I'd love to share it but need his permission & did invite him to see this entry so perhaps he will drop by.
The name Esmarelda is one I chose after researching on-line: "The girl's name Esmarelda \e-smarel-da, es-mare-lda\ is a variant of Esmeralda (Spanish), and the meaning of Esmarelda is "emerald".
The baby name Esmarelda sounds like Esmirelda and Esmaralda. Other similar baby names are Esmiralda, Emeralda, Emmarald, Ezmeralda and Esmiralde.
Esmarelda is a very rare female first name and a very rare surname (source: 1990 U.S. Census)." Think Baby Names. I chose it because I preferred the Spanish mar for ocean in the centre of her name than the French mer, and liked the English echo, elda, because Esmarelda is going to turn out to be an ancient woman, a Shaman, a seer, a prophetess (at least I think so, who knows as the writing progresses).
But in the next scene she returns home to the squalor of poverty in a South American slum, and an alcoholic mother perhaps. Esmarelda is a stunningly beautiful but ordinary woman who is not wearing the magnificent headdress of the first scene. We cannot be sure that her dreams of angels are not escapism from her daily life, an imagination run rampant to balance the harsh realities of what is at home.
And, no, not an autobiographic writing. The first few books I wrote were very autobiographical, the last few not. Esmarelda's life is purely imaginary...
Again, thank you for your gracious comments, your encouragement, your sensitivity, John. xo
Brenda, I'm not a writer, but I love your writing and am looking forward to reading more of this script..It's very beautiful and allegorical, yes, has the Wim Wenders touch, but I too love Wim Wenders. Good luck..I love Esmarelda..for a name and a character..I love the fact that she was born from your beautiful necklace and love angels..and the surreal quality of dreams and escapism..
ReplyDeleteHugs,
Claire
Dear Claire, Thank you so much for your kind and generous words... so inspiring! ...your art, of course, I LOVE, LOVE, LOVE! hugs xo
ReplyDeleteBrenda I am in awe! I cant wait to see how this develops. It is very deep and promises to deliver extraordinary imagery. I am truly honoured that my picture can help your creative flow and generate such passion. I must also say that you are more than welcome to use it at any point in your creative endeavours. I am awaiting with baited breath to see how this proceeds. I love the choice of name.
ReplyDeleteWaiting eagerly Bill xx
Bill, thank you so much for your comment... and your digital artwork! The images I have found much inspiration in are extraordinary in their complexity of construction yet offer the viewer an overall simplicity, and beauty. I can well see how the image which has formed part of the inspiration for the character here, Esmarelda, was also an inner journey for you as you created her. She carries that transformative quality with her. I have found her so as well and thank you for allowing me to describe my reaction to her as characterizations in this simple script... many blessings, with gratitude, my friend, hugs xo
ReplyDelete( As far as I can tell, poetry is a Spiritual Quest worked out in words, lines, stanzas, and whole works. The quest is very much for the Adamantine - The Unbreakable. As such the poet measures the the calibre of the work against the Adamantine. 99.99% of the time we fail - I mean mortal poets like you and I - we crash and shatter against the Adamantine. There is a hardness in poetry that is from a Spiritual Realm. We ask, can my poem survive this? We cannot get there by commentary, we must get there by the authentic discovery of the Adamantine. In what small sparks I've seen, this thing looks back at you very hard. Poetry is not really about words, though its face is a mask of words. Poetry is Spirit, and Spirit, The Adamantine, burns hard! We know when the burn begins. Its not enough to go inwardly, like they tell people in those seminars, we must go inside the inside, then inside of that - an so, aligned with the Adamantine, apply that force in words. )
ReplyDeleteThe above is some kind of theory of poetry that I follow on my better days. I've never been explicit about it to myself, but recent practice seems to be showing me this. Maybe. This early in your progress I find it hard to rush in there with opinions. From that I here refrain. I prefer to wait until you are further down the word and the work is fleshed out. Still, after the dryness of my way of working, the fecundity of your expression refreshes! Thanks for sharing Brenda.
Concepts that I find very appealing: altocumulus, seagull feather, sea-light ... but that's just me, heh!
Oz, really I hardly know how to respond, so I'm going to paste in here a comment I just left at your fb site: "You are like an e.e. cummings, a beautiful sensibility, offering a perspective on the world, on life, that is delightful in that slightly rebellious child-like way, though I know you are a fearsome intellectual Oz, and a serious artist. It's the playfulness..."
ReplyDeleteAdamantine! What a great word. But it appears Platonic, of the realm of 'eternal forms.' Hence, suspect. Nothing is enduring. I am rather into the soft and yielding... the disappearing. More Heidegger perhaps (though thankfully I am through my Heidegger stage:). Though adamantine as the light of a diamond, 'non metallic brilliant light,' yes. But Adamant as adjective: "resistant to reason; determined; inflexible; unshakeable; unyielding" (WIKI), no.
So, what you have written is poetry. And in the context of which you write, of the adamantine vision, a beautiful vision.
"Poetry is not really about words, through its face is a mask of words." Love this!
Though as a Semiotician, or inclining that way, of course the words mean everything and it is through the words that the poetry is imparted through a very complex symbol-system that we each carry in our consciousnesses that enables us to connect to each other meaningfully.
This piece of writing is proceeding aurally - I speak what's next into my computer and then type it from there. It's composed of 'found pieces' of life. Not looking for anything, no preconceptions. Shortly after this she has a dream, and in her dream the Martian landscape appears because that video has entered my consciousness and so it inspires what I'm writing, and I'm letting it...
Following the subconscious? Allowing what's found along the way to define the journey with its unknown destination?
Your writing has this too, Oz. Even if we're adamant about it.
:-) xo Thanks for your beautiful comment my friend, for your writing, drumming, painting, filming poetry.
Brenda, I sent you my comments via email, hope you received them.
ReplyDeleteHi Brenda,
ReplyDeleteFirstly please let me apologise for the delay in my feedback on your script.
Secondly, let me thank you for your invitation to read this wonderful and charming piece.
It is full of colour and wonder and mystery and beauty, it is very visual, and I was pretty much drawn in right from the start. It flowed really well for me. I do want to continue reading it further.
I also love the poetic language used in this piece, it adds another level to the beauty of images.
These are some of my favourite passages:
1) I liked all of Esmarelda's opening speech - very expressive and vivid and lyrical.
2) Loved the imagery evoked in this line "I don't have blood or bones. I’m composed of images, translucencies and opacities, pastel pencil lines and oil paint, planes of motion move when I walk."
3) " He wears only a white thong." : funny!
4) 'Angels are like bonobos, my dear!"
This is quite funny and ironic too, it makes an unexpected connection between the divine and the earthly and bestows animal drives upon celestial beings.
5) "Esmarelda, interjecting, points to a flock of angels approaching in the sky over the ocean."
Like the imagery of a flock of angels.
6). "There is a deep sound of angelic music, choral voices in a Philip Glass-type composition of layering of similar sounds until a tonal density is achieved."
Being a big fan of Philip Glass music, this scene description resonates strongly with me - I can almost hear what it would sound like.